Saturday, February 18, 2006

Part 3
Now for Part 3 of the Forlorne Redemption. This is our favorit part so far. So we hope you enjoy it ^^.

Adrian gulps and clenches his fists in preperation.

JUDGE: Adrian, I've read over this list of sins and judgeing by this, your chances are slim.

Death: Oh, let me see!

She appears behind the Judge, looking at the list over his shoulder.

Death: Hmm. Someone's been a naughty boy.

Judge: You will travel through the Velley of
Death. Along the way you will meet many demons who want to stop you from getting through. They cannot hurt you and you cannot hurt them, or the result WILL be Hell. They will use any trick they can, so keep an eye out.

The judge bangs his gavel and Adrian takes the form of what he was in the Vietnam War.

JUDGE: You will do this in the form you committed the most sins in. Appearantly that was in war time. Remember my one word of advice-you sin once, and you go to Hell.

DEATH:(smiling)No preasure.

AADRIAN:(scared to death) Yeah...sure...no preasure

The judge bangs the gaval and the darkness is lifted, revealing the entrance to a thick forest.

JUDGE: You may now enter the Valley.

ADRIAN:(staring at the entrance;to the judge)But...it's a forest.

DEATH:(offended)Hey! It's my forest, and I can call it a valley if i want to!

ADRIAN:(startled)OK,ok! Don't have a cow!

DEATH:(smiling again)Alright then.

She appears behind Adrian and shoevs him into the Valley.

DEATH:No hard fellings. ^^

A wall of plants behind Adrian, focing him to move forward. As he's waling he sees many demons, each trying to scare Adrian, some jumping at him and stopping just before reaching him. Adrian then flashes back, once again, to the Vietnam War. Adrian, along with his brigade walds through the jungle, accompanied by a single tank. Adrian's closest friend in the army walks directly infromt of him.

FRIEND: Hey, Adrian. I bet those Veitnamians are gonna piss themselves when they see we got a Panzer on our side.

ADRIAN:(chuckles)You bet!

FRIEND: Let's just hope we don't get ambushed before we get to cam-

That second blood splatters on to Adrian's face. The blood of his friend. The friend falls back, onto Adrian. Adrian catches him as two more American soldiers are shot in the head. Finally, one person realizes what's going on.

SOLDIER:Sniper!

Another is sniped as the tank takes aim. The tank fires in the general direction the sniper's bullet trails are coming from. That moment, Vietnamese soldiers emerge from the grass, firing at anyone who moves. One Vietnamese man climbs the tank, while uleashing a grenade. He throws it in the tank's peep hole just before being shot to death. During all the comotion, Adrian is nicked in the ear and falls to the floor. As he watches in horror his comrades die, he finds himself frozen in fear. Adrian comes back to the present. Standing infront of him is his friend from the war.

FRIEND: Long time no see, Adrian.

That cocludes part 3! We can't wait to see what happens next. Can you? Well you'll just have to! XP

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Sunday, January 1, 2006

Part 2
*Warning:This part is much slower than the others, but it compensates with comedy and serves the purpose of introducing the character and situation.*

ADRIAN:How...how did I die?

DEATH:You were ran over by a semi truck. Funny thing is,the driver's going to jail for vehicular homoside and it's all your fault. Why did you run in front of him, anyway?

ADRIAN:I was being haunted...by my past.

DEATH:Ooo...that's deep.

There is a slight pause as Adrian wathces the ambulance drive away.

DEATH:Well,if you want to come back to life,you have to make it through the Valley of Death.

ADRIAN:No thanks.Just take me away.

DEATH:Are you serious? If you go now, you'll go straight to Hell. Do you realy want to go through an eternity of torture? I know I don't. Plus,you'd never see your wife again. She's going to heaven.

ADRIAN:Gloria?...alright. I'll fight to live, only for her.

DEATH:That's what we wanted to hear!

A small,spherical light exits Adrian and hovers into his former body. Adrian,comletely caught by suprise.

ADRIAN:What was that?! Did you just take my soul?!

DEATH:Of course not. I just put a fragment of life into your body. I think you mortals call it a camma.

ADRIAN:A camma? Oh,you mean a comma!

DEATH:Yeah what ever. Now,unless your wife pulls the plug,you won't be burried. If your wife pulls your plug while you are in the Valley of Death, you go straight to Hell. Do not pass go,and do not collect $200.

She laughs at her joke,Adrian dosen't find it funny,though.

DEATH:Allright! Enough dilly-dallying! To the Valley of Death!

Death reaches out in front of her and grabs air. She then pulls inward and the sky begins to hove toward her. After giving one final tug she rips off the piece of sky and a black abyss sits infront of her.

DEATH:Shall we go? Ah, what do I care what you say.

She grabs Adrian by the arm.

DEATH:Face your past and find redemption.

She throws Adrian into the abyss and it closes behind him. Adrian lands flat on his face,though he can't see the ground infront of him. A spotlight apers and is focused on him.Adrian stands up as another spotlight focusses on a giganitic man of a judge.

JUDGE:Adrian B. Webster! You stand to trial for punishment! Will the defence now give it's case!

A spotlight shines on a young Indian girl in a Chinese kimono. She clears her throught and glances at Adrian.

INDIAN GIRL:Worm,your honor,I would first like to point out that Adrian B. Webster may have done some bad things in his past,but he has found the creator and pronounced his belief.

A spotlight then shines on a tall,pale young man with his hair slicked back.

PALE MAN:Objection,Worm,your honor! Intelligence has revealed that the defendant has fallen off the path. We all know how obvious it is that this Adrian deserves to burn.

INDIAN GIRL:Worm,your honor,if we could get his wife to defend him here,I'm sure you'd see that-

PALE MAN:But the fact is,she can't, and Adrian B. Webster was a foul and miserable exuse for a human being. If you want evidence Worm,your honor,we've compiled a list of the unimaginable sins this,quote,"man" has comitted. I'm sure the size of his "redeeming" qualities don't even compare.

The Indian girl bows her head in shame as the pale man hands the judge a small pamphlet.

ADRIAN:(to the Indian girl)Is that true? Is what he said-?

PALE MAN:Mr. Webster! How dare you insult me so! Unlike your lawyers on Earthe,WE never lie.

The judge looks at the Indian girl, and then at Adrian.

JUDGE:Adrian B. Webster. How do you plea?

ADRIAN:Well...I was told if I didn't redeem myself here and now, I'd go to Hell.

JUDGE:What? Is that what you're here for? Well why didn't you say so?!

The Indian girl gives a sigh of relief as the pale man scowls at Adrian.

PALE MAN:(muttering)What a waste of my time.

The judge bangs his gavel,and the Indian girl and pale man disapear.

JUDGE:Death!

ADRIAN:What?!

Death apears next to Adrian,who is completely taken by suprise.

DEATH:Yeah yeah yeah. I'm here,Worm.

JUDGE:Once again,Death,you've neglected to inform your patron of the proper procedures to apply for redemption.

DEATH:Did I?(laughs)Must have slipped my mind.

JUDGE:Nevermind. Adrian B. Webster, prepare yourself for the most greusome ordeal you've ever been through.

DEATH:(smiling big at Adrian)And you thaught military training was tough.


Well that concludes part 2. WE bet you thought Adrian was already in the Valley of Death. Shame on you for jumping to assumptions. Again, we hope you enjoyed it. ^^
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Saturday, December 31, 2005

PART 1
A young Adrian Webster stands with his riffle aimed at a fow of blindfolded Vietnamese men as his colenol speaks with his general. The colenol turns to Adrian and the rest of the soldiers who hold the Vietnamese men dead to right.
COLENOL-(muttering)We're going to
burn for this.(screams)
Fire!
Thirty-seven years later, Adrian Webster sits in his lounge chair watching a rerun of M.A.S.H. His wife throws Adrian's shoes on him as she walks up to him, carrying her keys.
MRS.WEBSTER-We're going out. Get
your shoes on.
At the grocery store Adrian and Mrs.Webster each carry a basket.
MRS.WEBSTER-Now,Adrian,I need YOU
to find two gallons of
low fat milk, low fat
butter, and 3dozen eggs.
We've got an army to
feed tomorrow.
Mrs.Webster then turns to a fow of cans and begins to examine them carefully. Adrian Webster walks over to the dairy isle.
ADRIAN-(talking to himself)An
army...
He picks up a bucket of low fat butter, and sees a figur in his parifial vision. He looks to his left and sees one of the blindfolded Vietnamese men with a blood drenched forehead.The Vietnamese man starts to speak in an illegible dialect. Adrian flashe back to the Vietnam War. He stands in front of a village covered in flames. Soldiers lead Vietnames women and children to a Hum Vee, and others leading Vietnames men in shackles. The colenol orders them to halt. He then calls to Adrian.
COLENOL-Webster! Get yer sorry be- hind over here!
Adrian runs over to the officer, and salutes.
ADRIAN-Yes sir!
COLENOL-Command wants us to line
these men up and put them
out of their missery. Get
to it!
ADRIAN-What missery,sir?
The General comes over to interupt.
GENERAL-Are you talking back to
your commanding officer?
These short squinty-eyed,
jibberish talkin little
bastards killed at least
ten good men each. Their
missery would be me
personaly torchering them
to death one at a time! But
I don't want to be cort-
marshaled, so get rid of
the timptation and kill
these Asian monsters!!
ADRIAN-Sir,what about their wives
and children?
COLENOL-They will be given a proper
funeral, afterwards.
GENERAL-(to colenol)The hell they
will!(to Adrian)Soldier,if
you ask one more question,
we'll blindfold YOU
instead!
Adrian comes back to the present,the Vietnamese man still there. He drops ther groceries he's holding and falls to the ground in terror. The Vietnames man puts his hand on Adrian's shoulder and repeats the same illegible words. Adrian quickly jerks away.
ADIRAN-What do you want? Why are
you here? Are you one of
the...that I...
The Vientames man starts to take off his blindfold as he fades away. A woman stands behind where the Vietnamese man was.
WOMAN-I'm sorry? Do I know you?
Adrian quickly gathers himself and returns to his wife.
MRS.WEBSTER-Honey? You didn't get
anything I asked you.
ADRIAN-I'm sorry. I-I just feel a
little light headed. I'll be
in the car if you need me.
MRS.WEBSTER-All right, Adrian.
As Adrian leaves the building the blindfolded Vietnamese man appears behind Adrian(his blindfold back on) and places his hand on Adrian's shoulder. Adrian turns to face the man and backs away.
ADRIAN-You...stay away from me!
He runs away from the Vietnamese man. As he runs through the parking lot,he is hit by a Semi-Truck. As Adrian's life escapes his body, he sees he Vietnamese man crack a smile. Adrian closes his eyes and the voices of a gathering crowd. Suddenly, he no longer feels pain or the blood ruch from his body. Instead he feels an astranged scence of joy and sadness at once. He feels as light as a feather,yet as weighed as a boulder. So, he opens his eyes. All he can see is a cloudy sky. He then sits up and realizes that he is floating. Below him,Adrian sees a group of paramedics rushing Adrian's body into an ambulance. His wife is crying a fiver, while another paramedic tries to comfort her.
ADRIAN-What on earth is going on?
DEATH-Your dead.
Adrian looks above him, and sees a white skined woman with golden hair, and blood red eyes. She gives him a big smile and floats down to his level.
DEATH-You're as dead as a tree
stump.^^



And that concludes part one. We hope you guys enjoyed it. Believe us when we say there's much more to come.
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