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Monday, January 8, 2007

   My story
I want opinions for my story can you read it and tell me how it is you can message me please no mean comments I've worked hard on it and want to write again.
Chapter One
Meet Iyana

"OW, my stomach," said Iyana. She was in a lot of pain she had been attacked the night before by some ninja. She was looking for a village to stay at to heal.
"Wow I didn't think that finding a place to sleep was so hard. I wonder if there is a village around somewhere,” she said as she clutched her stomach. As she was walking she suddenly got dizzy and fell down.
“Ah my head, wait a minute something is not right here I don’t hear anything.” She was worried she kept having thoughts about those men that attacked her. She thought that they would be back for her and the only reason that they didn’t get her before was because she had secret attack that was not suppose to use.
“He-Hello is anyone there,” She was still on the ground when she saw something move. “Come out now and tell me who you are.” Suddenly two men appeared behind her and grabbed her by the hair. She screamed for them to let her go but they wouldn’t listen.
“Hey let me go,” screamed Iyana. “Ha Ha, sorry but we need you for a little experiment Iyana.” She turned around just enough to see their clothes they were strange to her but everything was strange right now. The cloths were black with strange moons on them.
“Hey what experim-”screamed Iyana as one of the men hit her in the back of the head and she passes out.
“Good now she won’t slow us down,” said Renodei. Renodei walks up to her and picks her up and takes her with them.
“She’s a lot stronger than you thought isn’t she Yuan,” said Renodei.
“Shut up Renodei or I’ll kill you,” Renodei gives the girl to Yuan then backs off after that and he takes her into the building.

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