Wednesday, May 10, 2006

Hi!
I'm writing a story, haven't figured out what to call it yet...here is my first chapter:

Chap.1: Going off into the great unknown…
A/N: The main characters name…”Nyoko” it means Jewel (I would have used “wen” at the end like I originally intended but if I ever hope to get published I didn’t because wen comes from J.R.R. Tolkien’s Elvish Language he uses in his books). So without further ado I give you Chapter One of my story: New Beginnings.

“Stay back Elf!” shouted one of the guards as an elf rode up to the Capital of the Human part of the world, Northland. The world had four parts:
Northland, which belonged to the Humans, their capital being The Valley of Tranquility.
Southland, which belonged to the Elves, their capital being The Valley of the Peace.
Westland, which belonged to the dwarves, their capital being Cave of Ages.
Eastland, which belonged to the Elf Fairy half breeds, and the fairies, their capital being The Valley of Light.

Southland and Northland had been enemies since the beginning of time but they did agree on one thing, the Humans stayed out of Elf territory, and visa versa everything would be fine. So if this elf was in Northland, he better of had a good reason.

“I have come, to bring a message to the daughter of Baron and Baroni.” gasped the Elf. The guards looked at each other.

“Give us your weapons…” the first guard told him. The elf nodded. He gave the guards his sword, bow, and quiver, and the two small knives that were hidden in his boots. They escorted the elf to the home of Baron and Baroni, which was above the tailor shop.

“Hello how may I help you?” asked the brown-haired girl behind the cutting table.

“Nyoko! Thank heavens your safe!” cried the elf as he ran up to her and hugged her.

“Get away from me Elf!” Nyoko shouted.

“What’s the commotion?!” shouted Baroni who rushed down the stairs.

“Mother! The guards brought this elf in here!” cried Nyoko. Baroni sighed. Nyoko was seventeen; it was about time she found out…

“You haven’t told her yet ma’am?” asked the elf.

“No…” Baroni told him.

“Tell me what…Mommy?” Nyoko asked sensing her mother’s hesitation.

“Nyoko, you’re not really human…you’re an elf…and your father and I aren’t your real parents…” Baroni trailed off. Nyoko backed away. “You’re an elf…and I’m actually you’re aunt. Your father was human and your mother was elvish. I held and still don’t have a prejudice against the elves, so your father took you here to save you. We never heard from your father or mother ever again…” Baroni finished.

“Yes, Princess Nanaho and Cain are dead, they died while finding a safe haven five years after they left you here. Your elvish grandparents are dead. You are now the rightful heir to the Southland throne. You must come with me immediately.” The elf explained.

“Who exactly are you? How do I know I can trust you?” Nyoko asked.

“I’m Haku, messenger of the Royal House of the Southland. You can trust me. I’m also your younger brother, due to the fact that I’m more elvish-looking, Mother and Father left me in the household of a commoner in The Valley of Peace…no one knows that I’m of royal blood.” Haku explained.

“I will go with you, but do the Southlanders know of your true linage?” asked Nyoko.

“No, it would cause too much of an uproar, but they do know of your linage. So you are to come with me, we leave two days from now at dawn. I trust I may stay here ma’am?” Haku asked Baroni. Baroni nodded.

“Stay in our cellar, either Nyoko or I will bring you food.” Baroni explained. Haku nodded.

“Guards, please keep Haku’s weapons for two days…” Nyoko told the guards.

“We will if you pay us 500 gold coins…” one of the guards told Nyoko. Nyoko cringed.

“How about 500 gold coins worth of the finest cloth we have to offer for your wives?” asked Nyoko.

“We’ll take it…” the guard told her. She nodded and found five yards of the finest cloth the shop had to offer.

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The two days went by fast. Baroni made travel clothes for Nyoko, and gave Haku a full stock of food for the journey to Southland.

“Thank you for your hospitality ma’am…” Haku said his tall elvish frame bowing.

“’Bye Mother.” I hope I will be able to come back someday.” Nyoko told her mother. They hugged.

With that Nyoko and Haku walked to the guard station at the city gate to retrieve his weapons and his horse.

“How did your wives like the fabric gentlemen?” Nyoko asked the guards.

“They loved it.” Both guards said. “Good luck.” One of the guards told Nyoko, she nodded.

“Thank you.” She responded.

“Keep the horse, your going to need it.” Haku told the guards. Nyoko gave him a puzzled look. She wondered why on Earth he’d have a sudden change of heart towards the guards to give them their only means of transportation. With that, packs full of food, they walked out of the city.

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