Monday, April 16, 2007

Well guys here's the story. I've decided just to leave it as it is, but I would like to hear what you guys think of it so far. I'm basically asking you guys to give me your review of this chapter. I have to warn you it's long, so make sure that you are super comfy, and have a snack and drink in hand. ( Don't spill it on your keyboard! LOL) so please enjoy it, you guys.

" Gundam Lolita"


It’s a beautiful day with clears skies…on the L2 colony. 13-year old Maxwell Schbeiker rides his bike around the neighborhood.
" Oh hey there, Max! could you help me out with these boxes of sports equipment?"
" Um...well...I gotta get hom-"
" Thanks man! You're the best!"
[makes a weird frown]"You're welcome...Where do I start? [Starts assisting his gym coach by moving the heavy boxes]
{imediately cuts to him riding his bike again]
" MAX, sweetheart!" Mara calls to him.
[ screeches his bike to a halt. Mara is latin and needs to go to work at a Latin restaurant]
" Could you take me to my crib, hun?"
" Uh-"
" Oh thank you sweetheart!"
[suddenly jumps on the back of his bike]
"Um...Where to?"
[ rides off and drops Mara off to her house.]
" Thank you Max bye hun!"
"Max, Darling," yells Mrs. Willie. "Could you help me get my teeth out of my cup, they're stuck..." Max makes a slightly disgusted frown, and helps her out.
[ Max continues to ride around the neighborhood until he smells smoke. Suddenly a firefighter stops him]
" Hey Max! We need you're help! As you can see the library is on fire. The firehose is out of water! You gotta go hit another switch at the utility. There's one near your house! You gotta Hurry! Move it!"
Without trading a word, Max speeds off. He sees the utility near his house and rides up a ramp. He does a cool grind with his bike on the handle and releases the switch. The water immediately shoots out if the water hose and the firefighters extinguished the fire on the library.
" You're our neighborhood hero, Max." says a firefighter.
Max gives a smile of exhaustion. And rides to the the yard where his parents work. He arrives and parks his bike. He goes inside the little building and is greeted by his Mother and Father.
" Hey Max. How's your day been?" asks his Father.

Duo Maxwell is now 32 years old. You can tell by the tone of his voice that it is the same duo that we all know and love.

" Bad, Dad. Really Bad." says Max.
" Why's that?" duo asks.
" Because the entire town thinks that I'm their hero, Dad! I don't want to be a hero!"
" There's nothing wrong with that, Max," says his Mom hilde.
" MOM! I don't want to be the town hero, they ask way too much of me. Maybe I should go jump off a bridge while they're watching," suggests Max.
" If you do that, then they will have a nice cushion that's ready for you to land on." Duo says playfully.
" seriously, Dad, I can't stand being the big help around the neighborhood. Why can't Irvine do it instead?" Asks Max out of pure desperation.
" Because the last thing that your brother wants to do is help the neighborhood. Irvine would let half of the colony blow up before he even considers it. " says Duo slightly disappointed.
" Well Duo, Irvy just might be going through some tough times. I'm sure that there is a hero inside of him." affirms Hilde.
" Well, he hasn't showed me one so far..." Duo exits the room and goes outside.
" Max, don't worry about it, just go on home. Your father and I will be there soon." Smiles Hilde.
" C-ya Ma." Max Leaves and rides his bike home. He has not had any encounters. He parks his bike at the side of his home and goes inside.
" HI MAX!" yells his 5 year old sister, Demi, who is very hyper as well as her twin brother, Conrad.
" hey, Demi," says max sleepily.
" Where's Mommy and Daddy?" she asks in a high squeaky voice.
" They're still at work," Max yawns.
" Hey Max! I just saw a huge ferret at the park!." says Conrad running into the room. He jumps onto Max giving him an embrace any other hyper-active child would give their older brother.
" No you didn't! That was Misty's pet rabbit!" yells Demi suddenly. Conrad jumps off of Max.
" That was a ferret!"
" Oh my God, Conrad you're blind!" says Demi. They continue to argue with each other while Max goes into the living room.
" Wow, you look like you had a rough day," says his older sister Lily.
" What happened to you today?" Asked Phoebe, His other older sister who happens to be Lily's twin.
" I had to play the neighborhood hero today," Max says while he plops down on a couch.
" So that was you that helped put out the fire at the library?" asked Lily.
" Bummer." Says Phoebe.
" Finally! Somebody understands how I feel!" he suddenly sits up.
" What?" Asks Lily.
" Mom and Dad think that Being a Hero is great, and I shouldn't have to worry about it. They just wish that I was more like Irvine, but I'm not! I just want to be me!" Max goes to the table and picks up an apple.
" What you may not understand Max is that Irvine has not really made Mom and Dad happy for the past two years and they just don't want you to end up like him, that's all." Lily sympathizes.
" I won't, that's the thing that I want them to understand," Max plays with the apple.
" I'll be in my room," Max says leaving the room.
" Wow. I can imagine how he feels," says Lily.
"Mom and Dad both have to realize that Max is his own person. He doesn't have to live in Irvine's shadow."

Suddenly, Hilde and Duo enter the house.
" Hey Ma, Dad." says phoebe.
" How was work at the yard Mommy?" asked Demi.
" It was good. Did you two have fun at the park?"
" Yeah! Misty showed us her pet ferret!{Demi makes an aggravated face at this} it was huge!" said Conrad.
" No Conrad! It her rabbit!"
" Was not!"
"Was to!"
" Was not!"
" Was to!"
"Alright, Alright. Settle down you two." Duo says coming between the Children.
" Daddy, I think Conrad has a problem. He can't tell the difference between a ferret and a rabbit." Demi says walking away.
" Daddy, Demi's the one that has a problem! She's way too annoying for her own good." says Conrad as he goes outside.
" I think everybody has their fair share of problems." says Hilde.
" Where did Max go?" asked Duo.
" He's upstairs. He doesn't look to good." says Lily.
" Yeah, he's really depressed, can't really blame him.' says Phoebe.
She goes to her room and quietly shuts the door.
" I'll be back, I'm going to go visit the girls at the circus." says Lily.
She leaves and Hilde sits a grocery bag on the table and refills the bowl of apples.
" I'm worried about Max." says Hilde.
" So am I." says Duo.
" Do you think that we ask too much of him?" she asks.
" You know that I love every last one of my kids and I would never do anything to them to make them unhappy." he says.
" I know that, Duo. Something is definitely wrong with Irvine. He has changed in the past two years, and he still has never told us what was wrong with him." Hilde says rearranging the table.
" We all have our darks times, Hilde. Maybe he's learning. He could be fighting to get back to his normal life."

There is a knock at the front door and Duo opens it. A tall young man that looks about 19 years old with brown eyes and long reddish hair in a ponytail. He looks very exhausted and worn down. It is their first born son, Irvine.


*****Author's comments******/
I wanted to describe Lily's personal life with her family and friends so far and her relationship that she has with her friends. Please let me know how you liked some of the story. I will post up your comments about the story the next day. Just please...don't be CRUEL. LOL ^_^ Thanks!

~gwinggirl100


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