Wednesday, January 4, 2006

I need your oppinions!
Please can you tell me which intro for the carector you like better? This one:

Jana was 15 and turning 16 after Christmas. She had chocolate brown hair that hung between her shoulder blades, a natural wave conquered it. Her eyes are mint green that sparkled with amusement as she chatted with Katie down the path until she left. Then her eyes dulled out of boredom and a desire for her crush to notice her more often. It was a normal day for this day of the year at Red Brook Academy. The air held a casual tinge of frost that refreshed her lungs as she took a deep breath past a hoard of couples. The school gardens were over grown with rose’s this year. Their were rose’s of reds, pinks, whites, yellows, and a special shade of black dotted here and their that was hardly visible.

Her head chimed with her movements, a charm bracelet hung from Jana’s right wrist, the friendship beads were surrounded by numerous charms and bells. Her best friend Cassandra Williams gave her the bracelet 3 years ago, before she moved away. They were friends for 12 years and grew up together; they had a special bond that was indescribable. They E-Mailed each other everyday that they could tell each other about everything that happened. They sent the occasional letter to each other on special occasions.


“This will make a very interesting e-mail tonight,” Jana muttered to her self grimly getting up. She wore a long sleeved faded pink and white, shirt that flared at the elbows, and a pare of plain black jeans with a silver chained belt slung loosely around her hips. Jana didn’t like to stand out to much even though she had lots of friends; she cracked under pressure when they are all together and gazing up at her waiting for her to conduct the conversation and what they should do. She was their leader and enjoyed their friend ship but her fear of stage fright prevailed. Cassandra would help her out and take half of the leader ship which helped a lot, and helped tighten their friend ship. Ever since she left Jana’s fears have prevailed once again and she has become as shy as she ever did.


Or this one:

Jana was 15 and was turning 16 in a few months. She had chocolate brown hair that hung between her shoulder blades, with a natural wave conquering it. Mint green eyes sparkled with amusement as she chatted with Katie, walking down the path until she left. Than they dulled out of boredom.

It was as normal as it could be for this day of the year at Red Brook Academy. The air held a casual tinge of frost the refreshed her lungs, as she took a deep breath past a hoard of couples. The school gardens were over grown with rose’s this year; their were rose’s of different shades of red, pink, white, yellow and only one special shade of black that dotted here and their and was hardly visible in the patches of reds and pinks.

She wore a long sleeved faded pink and white, shirt that flared at the elbows, and a pare of plain black jeans with a silver chained belt slung loosely around her hips. Jana favored her black jeans and silver belts she just thought it looked really good on her.
Her hand swayed back and forth with her movements. A charm bracelet hung from Jana’s right wrist. The friendship beads were surrounded by numerous charms and bells. Each charm was given to Jana by one friend. She had 11 from her friends here and 4 from her friends in Canada.

Every night that Jana can, she usually writes an e-mail to all of her old friends and tells them what goes on down here. Every now and than from one friend or another she will get the same question. ‘Why did you move away so suddenly? What happened? You can trust us with what ever it is.’
The truth is Jana couldn’t trust anyone with the truth because only her mom had the right to tell anyone what happened to her. It happened almost 2 years ago now, but the memories are fresh and as painful as they were then.

Jana’s dad died of lung cancer when Jana was 7, and she had almost lost her mother as well. Her brother was too young at the time to actually know what was happening and both mother and daughter are relieved but still won’t tell him. No one other than those two, the police, a guidance councilor, and the man know.
The reason that Jana hadn’t dated since 8th grade is because that she is afraid. Jana has dated she has only had 3 boyfriends though and dumped her last one after that.

Unusual feelings to Jana have become apparent in her activities. Jana has always been the one and only Jana. She still is but she can have a lot of fun with guys like in playing games, and then some memory hits her and she feels shy sometimes, or extremely weary, or sometimes even afraid.
Different memories of her past always hit her in different spots. It has scared some people, and others that are just really concerned.


please tell me which one you like best!
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