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Tuesday, August 9, 2005


.... stress....
ok.. well today was my first time back to skating and guard. well skating went good, and guard.. well.. not soo good. i kept slipping when we danced... and my hands were like not working right. and yea.... but when i just got on to allpoetry, some fucking moron gave me this comment: hmm. seemed promising at first, but then u fall into "sorrow, pain, agony, broken heart" chant ive heard 2 many times before. nice idea 2 have repeatuing stanza (this kinda of looked like song lyrics, is it?) but honestly doesnt work, because this just doesnt say anything. just starts 2 get annoying, 2 self-indulgent. sorry 2 be so ruthlessly brutal. keep working on this, im sure it could really be something as long as u steer clear of overused words and trite phrases that murder poems.


so now im pissed....

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