Thursday, April 20, 2006

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Hi. Srry i haven't been on much. Tests r haunting me again. So howz everybody???
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Chapter 5



She only screamed louder. But this time, when she screamed, she was calling someone, “Neil! Neil help! Neil!” I thought she was gone nuts. She was yelling some guys name on and on. “What are you, retarded?” I asked, still holding her arm behind her back. But she kept screaming his name. “Shut-up, already. God.” I said. But no she didn’t listen. I banged her head in a tree a few times. That seemed to make her stop screaming the guys name and just yell. As I was banging her head against the tree I wondered if Neil was her dead boyfriend.
Just then I felt a hand on my shoulder and someone whispered in my ear, “You heard her. Let her go.” I stopped smashing her head but didn’t move my grip on her arm and turned around. A tall guy wearing a black full-sleeved shirt and blue jeans was standing behind me. I couldn’t see his eye color in the darkness but his hair was dark black and he looked quite angry. This, I thought, had to be Neil. “Neil?” I asked. He nodded. “Neil help! She’s gonna kill me!” Hannah wailed. “I can’t kill you,” I said, “when you’re already dead.” “Neil!” She yelled again. I let her go. No I didn’t go easy on her. She was just becoming so annoying, yelling the guys name. “Hannah told me about you. Why don’t you leave her alone?” Neil asked. “I have to help her. It’s my job.” I said. “Oh right, going around beating up the dead is supposed to help them?” He said with a little laugh. “No. I’m supposed to stop her from getting revenge.” I replied. This guy was becoming annoying. “Revenge?” He said, looking confused. He turned his head toward Hannah. “You never said anything about revenge, Hannah.” Then it hit me. Hannah didn’t tell her boyfriend the truth. “Oh right. You mean she didn’t tell you the part where she ruined my room with nail polish and where she tried to kill my brother and his soon-to-be girlfriend?” Neil blinked at me. Then turned his head toward Hannah.
So then I explained to him who I was and what my “job” is and how Hannah hurt my brother and his soon-to-be girlfriend.
When I explained it to him he looked quite angry. Though he wasn’t angry with me. Nope. It was Hannah who he was mad at. She wasn’t making eye contact with him.
“Hannah. You lied to me. Why?” He asked her. “Because…I knew I couldn’t fight her on my own! I needed someone else’s help. Someone who was much stronger than her. And-” Neil broke in, “and you used me?” He said in a toneless voice. “Well I had to stop her!” Hannah wailed. She looked as if she was going to cry. “Well,” I said shaking my head, “I guess you should have picked a better girlfriend.” Hannah and Neil both blinked at me. “Are you high?” Hannah said incredulously. “He is not my boyfriend. He just said that he’d help me stop you,” she pointed a finger at me, “from killing me.” “First of all,” I said, “I’m not high. Second, you’re already dead so how can I kill you? And third of all, I’m not going to kill you, but I am gonna break every bone in your body.” “I’m going to kill you.” Hannah said. “No you’re not.” Neil said, stepping in. “Yes I am!” Hannah said. “She broke my nose! I’m gonna kill her!” “Yeah,” I said, “well you broke my brother’s and his soon-to-be girlfriends bones. You so deserved it.” Hannah looked furious.
Neil stepped in-between Hannah and me and said, “Look, can you at least listen to me, instead of acting so stubborn?” He asked. “I am not stubborn! I’m going to kill her and if you stop me than your gonna die with her…” Hannah was yelling through gritted teeth. Neil and I turned around to see what she was babbling about.
But when we turned we saw that Hannah wasn’t wailing anymore. Her eyes were rolled to the back of her head and her face was red as a radish. Her hair was standing up in a static-y manner. She looked furious and scary. “Uh-Oh. Run?” I asked Neil. “Run!” He yelled.
I’m not a coward but I’m not stupid either. I’ve never encountered a ghost like Hannah. She was stubborn all right and stupid, too. A psycho lunatic ghost who wanted to kill everyone in her way was after me. God. My life is so perfect.
Not.
We didn’t run far when suddenly the ground started to shake. And I mean really shake! The grass in front of us split open and deep cracks ran in every direction. If we’d step on move then we’d fall down. We were trapped. “This way!” Neil yelled. He grabbed my arm and started running. It was hard to keep up with him since he was going really fast. I turned around and saw Hannah. She was floating in mid-air, mumbling something. This was one side of her that I hadn’t seen.
Neil stopped behind a tree. “I’ll stop her.” I said. “No.” He said, tightening his grip on my arm. “I’ll stop her. I can handle her. You have to go home.” I hadn’t exactly told him about my abilities. “But-” “Go home.” He broke in. And then he let go of my arm and whispered, “We don’t have much time. She’ll find us soon enough. I’ll distract her while you make a run for the gates. Got it?” I shook me head at him, “you don’t understand-” But he broke in again, “just do it!” And then he ran to where Hannah was floating.
I couldn’t just leave him here. I watched Michael go up to her and try to talk to her. Though I couldn’t hear what they were saying. Neil turned towards me, pointed towards the gates and mouthed “go”. But I stayed where I was and shook my head at him. I mouthed “no”. This got him mad and he muttered something through gritted teeth. Hey I couldn’t just leave him here and run away. That would be really wrong. Especially since I’m the one who made her mad and act like this.
Neil was still mouthing me to go. But I kept ignoring him. I really didn’t want to cause mass destruction here. But then again what choice did I have? Hannah was in no mood of games, not that I wanted to play any, and was destroying everything in her sight; and this ghost that I had never met before, who didn’t even no my name practically, wanted me to go home and leave this whole dirty job up to him.
I have never had any ghost defend me. And I mean never. Not even my own grandmother ever defended me when I was in a fight with a ghost. And this ghost, who’s not even related to me, wants to help me out. I felt like crying actually. But I didn’t start crying. I still had Hannah to deal with. I just had to do something. Leaving Neil here, with this freaky ghost, was not a risk I was willing to take. No way. Although I didn’t want to destroy Sky Walkers Park, I had to do it. But hey, it’s not as if it already isn’t destroyed. I mean, Hannah was already tearing down trees and swings and stuff.
I knew what I had to do. There was no other option. I had to use my abilities. And I had to do it, now.


Chapter 6

Look, I’m not the world’s best psychic. But I’m not the worst one, either. It’s not like I can’t control my power or anything. In fact it’s not what you think it is. I’m a psychic by accident. I wasn’t born with this job like most people. I got it by accident. And no, I didn’t wish to have this job. I didn’t wish at all.
See, it all happened when I was twelve years old. Me and my cousins and all were outside in the backyard. My cousins, Stephanie, Malcolm, Denis, Carrie and Shelly, were all there. All from my mom’s side of the family since my dad is the only child on his side of the family.
Denis and Malcolm the twins were five years old at the time and now are nine. Carrie was their sister who was seven at that time and now is eleven. Stephanie was a year younger than me. Grade wise, well. But not age wise. She was also twelve and now is sixteen. But Steph was and is smarter than her age. She’s always the quiet type out of all of my cousins.
Anyways, we were all there and having fun until I saw something in the sky.
I don’t know what it was, but when I looked up at the sky I saw something. It’s hard to describe. It was this green light that went passing by so fast it was almost a blur. Though I was the only on who saw it from my cousins and probably the whole neighbor hood.
After that day I could see ghosts. They came to me with their lousy problems. I mean what is up with that?
At first I didn’t realize it was because of the light. The one I saw in the sky I mean. But I managed to figure it out. Because when I met my first ghost who had asked me “are you that psychic they were talking about?” I asked him who “they” were? And he explained to me that “they” were the other ghosts who said that I saw the light, which was passed through the sky. Actually, at first I thought this was fun. But then I found out that ghosts came to me 24/7 asking for help. I tried to solve their problems as best as I could.
So you see, I got this ability by accident. It wasn’t even my fault.
Anyways, I knew what I had to do. Stop Hannah.

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