Sunday, October 16, 2005

Ok i wrote this so i would like to know what you people think of it so critque it in my guestbook plz
A 16-year-old girl with intelligent green eyes, waist length black hair and a pair of great silver wings and is about 5'8 comes in looking around. The tavern she is wearing a sleeveless purple kimono with silver lining on the back of it there is a symbol for a priestess on the back and also on her left arm there is a tattoo that says in small letters I will “never forget” and under that in capital letters “KIKYO,” she walks in she has a quiver of arrows and a bow slung across her back she goes to the bar and asks the bar tender for a cup of tea spots somebody watching her but decides to ignore them and takes her cup of steaming tea in her hands and slowly sips some of the warm drink, she finishes her tea and decides to go look around the place she gets up and spotting some stairs and takes them not knowing where they are going to take her

Having no idea what she is going to find not finding anything one the 2nd 3rd or 4th floors she goes to the roof and sits down not thinking about anything in particular slowly she relaxes and lays down watching the clouds thinking "how did I lose my memories who is Kikyo and why did I leave myself these little clues to my memories is it that I knew I would lose my memories im not sure " looking at her left arm and at her kimono "im not sure where am I to find her but I do no that she is an important key to unlocking my memories and mabey I should be looking for some help instead but who would help me once they learn the little I remember about my past and Kikyo.”

Suddenly she jumps up saying real quite like "I can feel him he is coming im not ready to fight him I have to get out of here" she runs to the end of the roof and jumps she is falling about 5 ft before she spreads her great wings they catch the breeze and she starts gaining altitude as she flies she gets higher and higher in the air then she just lets herself glide thinking "why me, why were my memories erased why did Kikyo and I have to go through this and why is he after me " "it’s because of him that I can’t remember or find Kikyo and that mom is dead I hate him”you can see hate go over her face as she thinks this.

Caught thoughts she suddenly losses control of her flying, her left wing had been shot with an arrow "damn how did they find me so soon im not ready im not strong enough I have to get out of here" trying to get away she folds her wings going into a dive straight down to the land below she crashes through the roof landing on someone she jumps up saying "oh my god im so sorry" she unfolds her wings trying to heal her left one "damn it won’t heal" throws all her power in draining herself but her wing was unaffected and just wouldn’t heal then she folds her wings.

then she starts to get up but stumbles landing on her knees to tired because of the fact that she had drained her self of all her strength trying to heal her wing. Her vision started fuzzing over then she fainted completely exhausted the last thing she said was "don’t let them get me please stranger"