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Monday, October 2, 2006


Improvin' the new story
Remember the story I was tellin' you about only what, one or two weeks ago? I gots an improved basic outline and character bios now, but I still need a title. I bet this'll be enouf for you to help me.
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Over 250 million "Casa dos Sonhos" lottery tickets were sold, but only three people would win. What was up for grabs wasn't cash, however, but a pricy mansion in sunny Rio de Janeiro. People in the Angola, Brazil, Cape Verde, East Timor, Guinea-Bissau, Mozambique, Portugal, São Tomé and Príncipe, and the United States were all praying for this season's dream house. When the final numbers were drawn, three 17-year-olds were ecstatic when their tickets' numbers were announced as the winners. The winners' names were Vicente Cavalcante, Adriano Baricelli, and Tânia Nakamúra, and they packed their things and jumped on the planes for Rio immediately.

Everything seems fine until weird things begin to happen at night. The oscillating clock on the end table in one of the kids' rooms suddenly begins to spin rapidly and stops just as fast. Blank stares are exchanged (as in the eyes are completely white.) Candles go out without being blown out. Mist enshrouds the house and areas on the outskirts of the city at night. Bulges appear in the walls— in the form of faces!— and wind screams on rainy nights. Apparently, nobody knew that the house is haunted by evil spirits— or the entire big city, for that matter! These spectres seek revenge, causing bad luck and trouble everywhere they go. The kids'll have to stop them— but first, let's meet our main characters:

Vicente Cavalcante— A Portuguese-American writer from Boston who never believed in any legends other than "Legends of the Hidden Temple." He speaks Brazilian Portuguese fluently and stays cool and laid back unless the goin' gets tough. Vicente gets on Adriano's nerves a whole lot of the time, but havin' Tânia there to break things up might be good after all.

Adriano Baricelli— An Italian-Brazilian sports fanatic from Belo Horizonte who is also tryin' to invent a new martial arts style. He frustrates easily, which may be his biggest flaw— his aggressive, impulsive personality rushes him into really bad situations (or just another fight with Vicente.) If he don't make it to a World Cup-winning soccer team someday, he at least wants to create the best martial art since Brazilian Jiu-Jitsu.

Tânia Nakamúra— A Japanese-Brazilian glamour gal from bustlin' São Paulo who can't keep a hairstyle for more than three months before she thinks it's gettin' old. There's no limit to how many reais she'd spend in one sitting (unless she winds up bankrupt, of course.) Tânia is also the superstitious member of the group and collects tribal masks, thinkin' they would keep evil spirits away. She has a major flaw, however— one pretty face can knock her for a loop, makin' her completely forget what she was talkin' about only a second ago.
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So, what d'yall got to offer me? It needs a name— you got one, make a suggestion, and I'll see if I like it. But for now, this is the Sarge relievin' you. DISMISSED!

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