Sunday, November 4, 2007

Storytime!
I finished the beginning of my story so I am posting it to see what you think. I know it isn't very good but I was wondering what you all think of it. I also have a new piece of fanart. It will show up on Tuesday.

Introduction

My name is Alyssa. I am 16 and have many friends. My two best friends are Alana and Solomon. My life is full of bad luck. The only thing that makes me happy is my friends. My life is always boring….or is it?

Chapter 1

~About 4 o’clock in the afternoon~

“Grrrr! This is so hopeless!” I was doing my math homework and getting nowhere with it when the doorbell rang. I went to answer it since my mom was downstairs on the computer and my brother was playing in his room. When I opened the door I saw Alana and Solomon standing there. “What are you doing here!?!?” I asked surprised. “We came to see you!” replied Alana. Alana was like a little sister to me. She was a little taller than me even though she was a year younger. “Yeah. Unless you don’t want us to that is.” said Solomon with a grin. Solomon was one of my best friends and though I had a crush on him I didn’t let it get in the way of our friendship. He was much taller than me and Alana though and I always felt short when around him. “No! I am glad you came. I needed a break from my homework anyway.” I told them. All of a sudden the ground underneath us completely disappeared. We fell and, though we tried to hold onto each other, we couldn’t hold on. I blacked out and when I woke I was lying on my back with a bright blue sky above me. “Did I die?” I thought as I watched the clouds go by, and then I thought of my friends. I sat up quickly but instantly regretted it. I must have hit my head for I had a splitting pain in the back of my head. I tried to sit up again but slower this time. When I had finally gotten into a sitting position I looked around me. I discovered I was sitting on the side of a hill with flowers around me. I could see a giant body of water not far away from the hill where I was located. I began to get tired form everything that had happened, so I lay back against the flowers and closed my eyes. My final thought was “Will I ever see them again?” before I fell into a peaceful slumber.



Questions:

1. What did you think of my story?

2. Should I continue it?

3. What should I title the Story and Chapter 1?

4. Questions for me?
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