Saturday, June 25, 2005

   revisions ^^;
Thank you guys for your imput last week, and of course since I write the next part of Hiei in RainbowLand the day I post them things like this happen. ^///^ Its rather embarrassing because at times like this I break the beautiful curtain of imagination to let reality set in XP I know this makes me look SO unprofessional! Well, more people liked the extent of Hiei crying, but then I thought it would be more dramatic if he didn’t until he was by himself and then not even let it all out. And forget the Fire and Brimstone Tears that Kurama Clone #2 was telling you about, he was just pulling your leg. I think this new way I have the story goes better w/ the plot and hope you like it too:

Pt 10 now ends like this, (only a line was deleted from the original)

Lurky grabs her [Yukina] by the back of her kimono, Kurama and Touya try to make him let go, but their powers are unusable due to the overwhelming energy radiating from the Dragon right next to them

Lurky: Huha! ^^ I did it! Look! I did it Murky!

Murky: checheche! Excellent! Lets go!

Lurky: But I didn’t get to ride the horsey! >.<

Murky: Keep hold of this brat till we’re back to the cave and you can buy a horse to ride anytime you wish!

Lurky: Realy? ^_^

They fly off in the distance and those knocked out by the Dragon’s force start to come too, when Hiei gets up he is weakened but manages to stand, he faces the horizon that the Dragon flew towards, he falls to his knees, hits the ground with eyes closed

Hiei: NOOOOOOO!!!!
***
Then in Pt 11 they go to the castle, Hiei leaves and recalls him and Kurama at the site of Murky and Lurky's cave...

Kurama: I’m sure your Jagan would be able to find your sister immediately.

Hiei: Don’t you get it? Or are you blind? Did you not see how those two buffoons had COMPLETE control over the dragon? I have trained for countless years and still can only bribe the dragon with my very soul for it to do my will. No one has EVER mastered it. Then these runts pop up ride it like a circus pony! I am just as susceptible to it as you while it is under their control. I-I want to save Yukina, but I can’t, not like this.

Kurama: Hiei…

Hiei: Save your speeches. She’s gone and I only have myself to blame.

***

Back in the present, Hiei walks down the cave where Murky and Lurky showed him the color crystals

Hiei: It’s all my fault…why? *sits on the ruble of color-less crystals he destroyed earlier* How could they have mastered it so quickly? *stares at his palm that he summons the Dragon with* If I hadn’t been so eager to destroy the color…*closes fingers over into a fist*….they would never have even known about it. *raises fist to chest and takes out Yukina’s tear gem to look at* I couldn’t protect you… *covers gem up* …I’m sorry. *eyes close and a lonely tear escapes and rolls down his cheek, turning into a dark round ruby that falls to the floor unnoticed*

And then enters Shy Violet while he hides the tear gem from Yukina, not noticing his on the ground.
***

Okay, now we can return to the castle and have our feast and Part 12 of Hiei in RainbowLand! (and I appologize if you find it long and boring, but you have to admit Hiei needs lots of convincing to move on...at least I didn't turn it into dbz and have this part go on for weeks then have a part of flashbacks to recap before continuing the story!)

***

Refi: Welcome my faithful subjects to tonights feast and storytelling! Kurama Clone #2 has something to tell you all…

Kurama Clone #2: We are having hamburgers tonight! ^^;

Refi: Not that, dear, the other thing!

Kurama Clone #2: I’m sorry I lied about the story and Hiei’s tears. No matter how traumatic, he would never cry in public, and since his Dragon was able to destroy RainbowLand, then so would his tears if they were really fire and brimstone. But it did make a good cliff hanger and by your reactions, proved to Refi that you do actually read the post ^^

Refi: Ok ok, enough! On to DINNER!!!

***You go to the feast and construct your own SUPER BURGER and enjoy mingling w/ the cartoons while eating then you all migrate to the story telling room.***


Hiei: It wouldn’t make any difference if you did know about me.

Shy Violet: I bet it would. I only want to help you Black…

Hiei: *turns* WILL YOU STOP CALLING ME THAT! My name is Hiei, not Black Night!

Shy Violet: Hee-ay? Why didn’t tell us that sooner.

Hiei: Like you guys would listen. *turns away*

Shy Violet: I’m sorry V_V

Hiei: Whatever.

Shy Violet: I know I can’t make you tell me about yourself. To remain shut off from the world is your choice. I wish there was more that I can do, but if not…I’m glad I know your real name, Hiei. *turns to go and spots the ruby tear gem on the ground* What’s this?

Hiei: What’s what? *turns to see she’s picked up his tear and is examining it* Nothing.

Shy Violet: It feels strange. Like just holding it makes my whole body sad.

Hiei: Then drop it.

Shy Violet: Yet it’s beautiful…even in its own forlorn way.

Hiei: *snatches the gem from Shy Violet and throws it* Forget about it and return to the castle where you’re safe.

Shy Violet: o_o *recovers from shock* Why don’t you come back to the castle too?

Hiei: I don’t belong there.

Shy Violet: You shouldn’t be alone, I’ll stay here with you.

Hiei: I can take care of myself.

Shy Violet: v_v Very well… *walks to where Hiei threw the gem and picks it up then starts to leave*

Hiei: What do you think you’re doing?

Shy Violet: ^///^ I wanted to keep it, it is pretty.

Hiei: Even though it makes you sad?

Shy Violet: Yes, it makes me feel the loneliness that I imagine you must feel, the hurt, the sorrow, the pain…

Hiei: *stares at Shy Violet*

Shy Violet: If you don’t mind, I’d like to keep it to remember you, my friend.

Hiei: *startled* Perhaps…

Shy Violet: I should let you be though. *starts to walk out*

Hiei: Wait.

Shy Violet: Yes, Hiei?

Hiei: *avoiding eye contact* A-are you still interested?

Shy Violet: Pardon?

Hiei: In getting to know me, learning how I feel?

Shy Violet: Y-yes…do-do you want to share?

Hiei: I could try. But I’ve never done so before. I don’t know where to start.

Shy Violet: Its ok, maybe you don’t know how. I could tell you about myself first so you can see how, then it might not be so awkward for you. I know doing new things can be scary.

Hiei: -_- I’m not scared.

Shy Violet: Oh, of course not. ^^;

Hiei: Go ahead.

Shy Violet: Huh?

Hiei: Tell me about yourself! I don’t have all day.

Shy Violet: Right! ^^

*****convo edited out so as not to bore readers*****
Shy Violet explains about her life in RainbowLand the good, the bad and even discloses some insecurities, then prompts Hiei to tell about himself, he says that he and the others are all demons, their real names, him being a forbidden child, Yukina is his sister, and about the dragon being of his own doing, this explains the tear gem that Shy Violet holds and its aura sends her the emotions concealed within
*****end convo summary*****

Shy Violet: O.O …I had no idea…I don’t know what to say…

Hiei: There’s nothing more to say.

Shy Violet: I’m sorry, I’m trying to understand, to feel as you feel. Does that make you feel better? That you don’t have to bare this burden alone?

Hiei: What?

Shy Violet: I’m here for you.

Hiei: *raises eyebrow* Even though I am the cause of all of your sufferings?

Shy Violet: Of course! You are still my friend. I will help you.

Hiei: There’s nothing you can do, even if I told you everything.

Shy Violet: Wanna bet? ^_~

Hiei: What in the name of Demon World are you referring to?

Shy Violet: Well, with enough color crystals, we can send out a rainbow and the light of it can overpower the Darkness so you can get your sister back safely!

Hiei: >.> You really think the Dragon of the Immortal Flame can be beaten by a silly little rainbow?

Shy Violet: If you are in a dark room and turn on a flashlight, can the darkness overpower its beam?

Hiei: Do you expect me to answer that?

Shy Violet: Trust me, I know we can win.

Hiei: We’ll need a plan, there are questions I want answered before taking out Murky, Lurky, and the Dragon. Still it looks like your rainbow is our best bet.

Shy Violet: I wish I could help you here, but every color needs a person to operate it for the rainbow to work.

Hiei: Would Kurama suffice?

Shy Violet: *thinks of Great Rose* He doesn’t know how.

Hiei: Can you direct him if he were talking to you telepathically?

Shy Violet: Perhaps, we could try that!

Hiei: Good. I’ll need you for my plan.

Shy Violet: *jumps* ^__^ What do you have in mind?

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