Monday, December 17, 2007

   Story opening decided!
Thank you Angel Zakuro for noticing the tense problem! I'm always really bad about mixing them up in my writting. It's all fixed now though, I edited my post!
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Ok, so I know I said it'd be at the end of the week, but it was a pretty obvious who was going to win! Opening one wins! Though in my personal opinion I liked the second one so That's a little bit of a loss for me, but I even showed it to my friends at school and no one liked the second one! So, I'm going to go with the 1st one... But! I don't want to let the 2nd one go so easily, so what do you think about switching between point of views? I already wrote a page in the narator's p.o.v. while he's watching the main character, so tell me if it's to comical for the story, I'm a little worried about that. If I don't follow the main character's p.o.v. at all in the story I'll probobly follow his love interest, but then she'd turn into the main character wouldn't she? Ah well! Here it is!
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“Meep meep meep” An alarm clock blared in a once quiet room on a warm spring morning. In this room, our hero awakened from a deep slumber. Slowly he sat up and looked around his room in a daze as though saying, “Where am I again?” After a few seconds he realized that he had awakened from a good nights sleep, and feeling refreshed, he stretched. But wait! He stopped in mid-stretch and made a face of annoyance. Slowly he put his arms at his sides and turned his head to the right, where the source of a loud repetitive sound was, and fiercely glared as if saying, “…SHUT UP ALREADY, I’M AWAKE!!!” But it didn’t stop, even though its job was done. It kept blaring, and soon the boy grew EXTREMLY tired of it. Sighing, and irritated, he threw the sheets off of his legs and went to turn off his alarm clock. Once the job was done and the noise was gone, he sighed with relief and resumed his stretching and yawning. Once this ritual was completed, it was time for him to ready himself for school.
You say you want to know more about this boy I call a “hero” do you? Is he your hero? Well yes, he is! Though I doubt all but a few humans know they’ve been saved by him, he’s only famous for it in our world. He didn’t only save our two worlds though, he saved everyone from our enemy! But we’ll talk about that later. For now, let me describe to you what our hero looks like, that handsome dog!

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Yup, that's it so far! Well, other than advice on the level of seriousness in the story, I also need help with names and descriptions of what the characters should look like! Help me please!! Okay then, I probobly forgot something but for now that's all! Give me your honest opinions!

And now, guess what guess what! I'M L!!!

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And I'm Allen! OMG I LOVE ALLEN! The things it says on the picture describe me almost perfectly!!





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Aaaaaaaaaand a Zora! The words are so true it's scary!

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I have no idea how I got this but OMG IT'S FUNNY!!! Don't worry, I have a sense of humor!

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